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DoublePlusGood
Joined: 08/14/01
Location: Portland, Or
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This one is super pop, it's pretty fun, I like the drone bass I did. I'm going to rerecord the vox with my room mate this weekend, but i wanted to post this for feedback. It's called "A Note So High"
-Erik
http://media.artistserver.com/tracks/41/15993/1/1/0/DoublePlusGood_-_A_Note_So_High.mp3
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Second Thought
Joined: 05/05/02
Location: Oh God knows.
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Song: pretty.
Production: a bit 'thin'. Give me some heavy beats.
But lovely track, aye.
Drug use for children has for many an education and with obvious alarm to both parents on the increase almost yearly.
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Fourier
Joined: 08/13/01
Location: Florida, USA
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Nice track! I like all the crackly percussion. Yeah there is no bass whatsoever! Kind of "computer speaker" production I guess 
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DoublePlusGood
Joined: 08/14/01
Location: Portland, Or
Posts: 157
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RE: New Track
Wednesday, December 6, 2006 at 10:07 AM
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huh, I kind of meant for that droning noise to be the bass, but maybe it's not bassy enough. Bummer, I'll have to fix that. Thanks for the listen Guys.
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Kylo
Joined: 02/16/05
Location: San Francisco
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Hey, great voice. This is really well put together- reminds me of Ochre in the beginning percussively!
Very cool Eric, this really jams well in a clean sounding way; that would be without the bass as was mentioned. Your voice becomes a little too flat every now and then in the melody, but the conclusion was great! I was loving the sound at 3:15 from the vocal aspect.
I believe a good way to fix that flat thing I mentioned is to make yourself a little more sticcato and don't hold on to the notes as long; I'm talking about points around 1:22 where you sing "Soo hiiiiiyeiiy!" Maybe you could do "So hi!" It'd be kind of a deal where the instruments could have a small solo and it'd be kind of a cute little part of the song. I only say that because the sound gets a little muffled when you say "SO".
At 3:56 though, that "so hiiiiiii" is perfect- not overpowering, but it's like you're looking away from the microphone and hitting that note with your eyes closed.
Good job, I bet this was a hard one to put together.
(Since when did I become such an avid AS judge of others' stuff??)
"Energizer bunny arrested- charged with battery."
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DoublePlusGood
Joined: 08/14/01
Location: Portland, Or
Posts: 157
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Hey Kylo,
I think you're a perfect advice giver . And thanks for the detailed critique! Your right, I do tend to go flat, the vox is a little unrehearsed, for two reasons. A, I'm lazy and anxious, I just like finishing vocal tracks, since I record myself, I'm really bad about making my voice sound just right. B I'm recording it with my room mate, he has better vocal equipment. He has a Neumann mic that runs into a presonus eureka, I used the neumann, but into a really crappy preamp, so I wasnt too particular, he also has melodine, so maybe I'll just cheat, haha. I'm glad you liked the thinner sound. I also like your suggestion about changing how long I hit one of the high notes, it might make for a nice break from the rest of the track. It's funny you mention the last note thats almost exactly what i did, back up from the mic and all. THanks again man. !!!!
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Kylo
Joined: 02/16/05
Location: San Francisco
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Well I'll tell ya what- I really think you should use that part of your voice more. Where you put feeling into it- in the beginning it seems to lack the 'powa' ; I understand that's your climactic area and you're creshendoing more energy into it there... So this is why I mention sticcato: it's short, and quick energetic bursts- enabling you to destroy any hint of sounding like you're unstable to the listener in the beginning.
I think it'd take some practice, but you could find where you want to draw out your notes and hold back a little. Now I realize that the whole tune is constructed where you draw out your notes most the time, but it's all about finding an interesting sound in yourself- and your voice really comes out at 3:56!
I'm telling you! Harness that, and you'll be a friggen rock star. 
P.S. I would try to get the vocalization to match the percussion 'pop' sound; right on the beat. It would help blend it better because your voice is somewhat of an alien to the other sounds. It's all about Michael Jackson actually-
Have you ever noticed Michael's voice, how it sounds just like the instrumentation?? Just a thought.
At 2:48, you're doing it- blending in. Throughout, it's beautiful after- but main vocal is too 'upfront' right now.
Good luck ay.
"Energizer bunny arrested- charged with battery."
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Multi-Panel
Joined: 09/23/01
Posts: 217
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i didn't read the thread (yet) so sorry if i repeat something.. like you forgot to tag the mp3! (i do kind of like "The Author" as a band name)
love the beat!! very max/dsp (or something, whatever that is) very doofgoblin.
as usual it takes a little time (for me) to get into the vocals.. but the synths help, great production. love the build-up.. the beat gets filtered.. back is the sad synth. really good.
i don't know if this one is that poppy.  (i like it a lot too)
i mean there no easy chorus yet, right..
i am trying to figure out how to improve this track. i like the 3.59 part.. maybe the part just before that could be eliminated.. the track lost me there for awhile.
i love the massive choir of vocals here, reminds me of Joseph Arthur.. do you know him? I got one of his albums.. it has strange beats, New Order influences, a bit of Eels pop too.. it's pretty good. (it's called Our Shadows Will Remain)
as for you track, it's very good.
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DoublePlusGood
Joined: 08/14/01
Location: Portland, Or
Posts: 157
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Thanks Ludo, yeah, that weird part is... well weird. I have this formula I keep writing in, which is verse chorus verse choruse bridge chorus. Like almost all my vocal songs are like that, so I was just trying to have a non vocal bridge to break the monotony. I kinda like how it works up to the big choral part.
BUt i'm glad you dug it! thanks for listening, I was worried, did you go somewhere, I noticed you hadn't been posting on anyone's new track posts. Haha!
-Erik
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nokalypse
Joined: 06/11/02
Location: Athens, Greece
Posts: 73
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RE: New Track
Wednesday, December 20, 2006 at 10:04 PM
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AH, this will be a really lovely good tue after you raise the mid-low and low frequencies. So lovely vocal singing Erik! I always like your singing. There is a light mood in it and like you said it is very pop but in a good way. Fix the mix a bit and it will be perfect!
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DoublePlusGood
Joined: 08/14/01
Location: Portland, Or
Posts: 157
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RE: New Track
Thursday, December 21, 2006 at 10:21 PM
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I tried adding more bass, see if this sounds better, my speakers I listen to the songs on are sitting on my floor, and they are stereo speakers, so they sound SO bassy, thats why some of my tracks lately might sound basseless, cause I roll off the low end too much.
http://media.artistserver.com/tracks/41/15993/1/1/0/DoublePlusGood_-_A_Note_So_High.mp3
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nokalypse
Joined: 06/11/02
Location: Athens, Greece
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RE: New Track
Thursday, December 21, 2006 at 11:18 PM
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Yeah, it sounds good now. Erik, you know, listen to some of your beloved music before and after mixing/mastering your own music. It will help. But you know your stuff...
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